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More and more students are studying at universities abroad. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad. Support your arguments with reasons and/or examples from your own experience and observations.

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Currently, there is an ongoing debate between people about the reasons why
students
 are studying at
universities
 abroad.
While
 it is possible to claim that studying abroad provides them with better professional opportunities, my view is that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. In
this
 essay, I shall explain my point of view by analyzing both sides of the argument.   There are several reasons why
students
 are flying abroad for studies. One of them is that there are a lot of scholarship opportunities that attract millions of outstanding
students
. It can
also
 be argued that
students
 are finding fewer opportunities in their native country for a career after education. It should
also
 be taken into account that studying in foreign
universities
, add value to their portfolio and resume.   Those who argue for studying at
universities
 abroad
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because it is cheaper compared to their home countries have a different view and say that it can be a bad idea.
Firstly
, it is claimed that the national economy is getting hampered, especially in countries like Nepal or India, as many teenagers are flying abroad leaving the nation with less workforce. For them, there are concerns about economic instability.  
While
 there are strong arguments on both sides of the case, I believe that every student deserves a quality education and an experience of a lifetime. I would strongly recommend that they should utilize their experiences studying at these accredited
universities
 and help their native countries to grow
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 every aspect of education and the economy.
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task achievement
Use concrete and specific examples to support your arguments. For instance, mention a particular scholarship program or a success story of a student who benefited from studying abroad.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear, central idea and that the transition between paragraphs is smooth. This will enhance the overall coherence of the essay.
task achievement
You present a balanced discussion by considering both the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad, which shows an understanding of the complexity of the issue.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame your arguments.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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