The map shows bookstor in 200 and now

The diagram displays some changes to the bookstore in 2000 and the present that have been improved for readers.

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, the place has undergone significant changes to make it attractive for reading. To illustrate, several modifications can be seen in the present bookstore. The most essential development is that there is a reading area in which the shopper can read books in-store. As you can see, some sections,

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as travel, new books, and service areas, remained in the same places from 2000 until now.

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, some new things have been added, including a place to sit in the shop's

center

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, a coffee corner has been added, which you can enjoy when you read.

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, there are some rearrangements to facilities. The fiction novel area has been downsized and replaced with art, hobbies, and cooking shelves.

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, the non-fiction books have been transferred to the left corner of the store.

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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

155 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

distribution
demographic
economic factors
digitalization
online bookstores
independent stores
chain stores
services and functions
community events
modern technologies
consumer preferences
transformation
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