The table provides information about the projected costings for sustainable forestry in West Africa, Central America and South-east Asia within the next 5 years, while pie chart indicates spendings of the projects for the first year.

The table provides information about the projected costings for sustainable forestry in West Africa, Central America and South-east Asia within the next 5 years, while pie chart indicates spendings of the projects for the first year.
The table forecasts the amount of
money
measured in US dollars which will be used for the next five
years
for maintaining the forest. Yet, the pie chart shows the expenditures to spend in 4 different areas in
year
one. When considered together, there is no correlation between the
two
sets of data. The table indicates that West Africa allocates $10.5
million
in the first
year
, the number
then
decreases by around a quarter the
year
after and drops to just $2,5
million
the next
two
years
but it increases by a
million
at the end
of the projected
year
. Central America starts at $20
million
and it plunges by almost 50% in
year
two
before dropping to $5
million
respectively for the next three consecutive
years
. Southeast Asia spends $30
million
at first. the amount drops by a third in the second
year
yet it doubles in
year
three and ends at $50
million
in the
last
two
years
. The pie chart shows that in the first
year
, the major expense is on salaries, accounting for 50%, followed by training which takes a third of the
money
allocated. Only 10% of the
money
will be used for not only training but
also
office. In conclusion, in five
years
, the amount of
money
which will be used for environmental recovery
decreases
Wrong verb form
will decrease
show examples
for West Africa and Central America.
In contrast
, Southeast Asia prepares more
money
in
year
five. Meanwhile, the data in the other chart shows that half of the
money
is
prepared
Verb problem
spent
show examples
for
Change preposition
on
show examples
salaries. Costs
ranks
Change the verb form
rank
show examples
second,
while
office and training employees need the least
money
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, years, year, two, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drops" was used 2 times.
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