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Band 7.5

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which conatined some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter - correct the information in the article -explain wy it is important for the magazine to give correct information -suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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Respected Editor, I am Ram from the
town
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 of Kailasha, India. There was a recent article about my
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 printed in your reputed travel magazine "Traveloka" on 12th May 2024. Though most of the information mentioned was accurate, there were certain facts which got wrongly depicted.
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, I would like you to correct that information about my
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 in your next month's edition. Our
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 is reputed for serene tea estates and we take a lot of pride in maintaining those estates.
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, in the article, it was mentioned that the tea estate owners don't care about its cultivation and don't maintain it properly, which is a wrong fact. Since the local economy is driven by tourism,
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 misrepresentation of facts in your magazine can severely affect our incoming tourist numbers impacting the livelihood of many local
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.
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, as a
town
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 representative, I kindly request you to send an additional field team to verify the facts and based on that make necessary amendments in next month's edition. Yours sincerely, Shiva

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task achievement
While the letter covers the main points effectively, it would be even better if the inaccuracy about the tea estates was described in slightly more detail to reinforce the importance of the correction.
coherence cohesion
The paragraphs could be balanced more evenly to enhance clarity and readability. For instance, separating the impact on tourism into its own paragraph could make the letter more structured.
coherence cohesion
The letter opens and closes appropriately with polite greetings and farewells, which sets a respectful tone.
task achievement
The writing tone is suitable and respectful, suitable for addressing the editor of a reputable magazine.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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