The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

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The line graph is a figure revealing data about the change in the

population

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among four

countries

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with Asian nationality who were living in the cities from 1970 to 2020.

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,it estimates the changes that will happen between 2030 and 2040.

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increasing trends can be seen in the percentage of the urban inhabitants from 1970 to 2020 in all these

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, increasing trends in the number of urban inhabitants will continue until 2040. It can be clearly seen that all

countries

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have growing trends from 1970 to 2019. Afterwards, the

population

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Filipinos

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urban inhabitants had a fall from 50

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in 1990 to almost 40

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per cent

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in 2010,followed by

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a gradual

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raising to about 55

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until

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2040 . Meanwhile, the percentage of the urban

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in Malaysia ,Thailand and Indonesia has increased by about 30%,3%and 20 % respectively from 2010 until 2020 .

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this

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increasing trend will continue until 2040. Malaysia with a sharp rise will become the first

asian

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country in urban area

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then

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Indonesia and the Philippines will

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as the second and third populated

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respectively. and Thailand's

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after its nearly unchangeable trend from 1990 to 2020 will grow gradually to about 50% of the total

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in 2040.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, countries with synonyms.

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

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