The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The line graph is a figure revealing data about the change in the
population
among four
countries
with Asian nationality who were living in the cities from 1970 to 2020.
Also
,it estimates the changes that will happen between 2030 and 2040.
Overall
increasing trends can be seen in the percentage of the urban inhabitants from 1970 to 2020 in all these
countries
.
Furthermore
, increasing trends in the number of urban inhabitants will continue until 2040. It can be clearly seen that all
countries
have growing trends from 1970 to 2019. Afterwards, the
population
of
Filipinos
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urban inhabitants had a fall from 50
percent
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in 1990 to almost 40
percent
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in 2010,followed by
gradual
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raising to about 55
percent
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until
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2040 . Meanwhile, the percentage of the urban
population
in Malaysia ,Thailand and Indonesia has increased by about 30%,3%and 20 % respectively from 2010 until 2020 .
Similarly
,
this
increasing trend will continue until 2040. Malaysia with a sharp rise will become the first
asian
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country in urban area
population
then
Indonesia and the Philippines will
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as the second and third populated
countries
respectively. and Thailand's
population
after its nearly unchangeable trend from 1990 to 2020 will grow gradually to about 50% of the total
population
in 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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