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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates statistical data regarding the number of five nations who lived within the same five countries namely, Britain
Germany
 Italy
Polish
 and Spain in 2011
Overall
,
while
 Spain had the largest amount of foreign citizens,
of
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the
Polish
 reported the lowest sum.
Moreover
, it is conspicuous that migrating to
the
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other countries is more common among the
Polish
 citizens ,when it was the lowest demand by the Spanish people. when looking at the given data, Britain has hosted a significantly high capacity of
Polish
 citizens accounted 550,000 followed by
Germany
 and Italy which witnessed 297,000 and 119,00 respectively.
Although
 a minor proportion of the Spanish selected England as a living place, the majority of them decided to be residents in
UK
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 depicted by the remarkably larger portion of nearly 400,000. Among
Spanishs
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Spanish
 visitors,the
Polish
 reported the tiniest figure which is nearly half that of Germans and Italians who had a value of 200,000 approximately.
Germany
on the other hand
,
have
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 received more than 550,000
of
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Italians and is recognized as the most frequent residents,whilst Polished gained second place reporting a hundred thousand lower than it.
Similarly
 a figure of five times smaller than the Italians have stepped
Germany
 in that year. Meanwhile, in the means of Italy and the
Polish
, Spain has given the lowest interest for both , when
a
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 largest of about 100,000
of
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polish
 stayed in Italy and
of
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Germany
 took that for the
Polish
 which accounted
4420
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, polish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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