The graph shows the number of visitors to a variety of art galleries in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and repo fling the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of visitors to a variety of art galleries in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and repo fling the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart
give
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data about the number of people who
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a
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various
of
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art
museums
in 2011. The units are measured by number of
visitors
/
millions
.
Overall
, it is clear from the chart that the
louver
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was up to the
peck
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.
Moreover
, the Metropolitan
,
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and the British
museums
had
same
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pattern. it can observed that the lowest three galleries were the
national museum
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National Museum
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of Korea, the
museo
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del
prado
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,
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and state
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state
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the
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Hermitage Russia.
According to
what is shown, the
louver
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was the
highest
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museums
that people visited
at
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9
visitors
/
millions
.
In addition
, The USA, and The UK
museums
were nearly from each other at mostly 6
visitors
/
millions
. It is interesting to note that all the three
latters
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letters
museams
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museums
have the same pattern with
a
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slightly
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differnces
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differences
difference
, to be more specific the
national museum
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National Museum
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of Korea reached 3.2
visitors
/
millions
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million
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,
while
the
museo
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Museo
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del
prado
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achieved 3
visitors
/
millions
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million
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, and
finally
State Hermitage Russia at 2,9
visitors
/
millions
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museums, visitors, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • fluctuations
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • trend
  • visitor demographics
  • attendance
  • special exhibition
  • promotional campaign
  • footfall
  • gallery capacity
  • cultural attraction
  • art enthusiasts
  • exhibit
  • statistical comparison
  • tourist attraction
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