Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the contemporary era, the majority of people are showing an upward tendency towards using home remedies without considering their doctors' advice.

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shift brings convenience to individuals, I vehemently consider it

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negative development

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medication. Being not sophistically educated in

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field, they don't know what treatment suits them best.

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, there is the threat of exacerbating the condition if given

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the wrong remedy, ultimately jeopardizing their

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health.

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, as their ailment worsens,

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experience frustration and a mental breakdown. Green tea,

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intensified

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and exhaustion, recorded a subsequent

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, they not only failed to address the

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brought about more mental and physical conditions.

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beyond exacerbating the diseases and imparts disadvantages by generating new infirmities which wouldn't have thrived if not used the wrong medication. By targeting the wrong features of a condition, patients trigger other diseases related to that organ or others;

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, they'd do

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damage to their health. What's more, having to deal with more infirmities at a time, would worsen their mental well-being

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, contributing to a reduction in their quality of

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vitamin D without asking their doctors, experienced severe gut ailments caused by the accumulated amount of

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home remedies are seemingly more accessible, they bring about detrimental

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the generation of other infirmities jeopardize individuals' physical and mental health conditions, ultimately lowering their quality of

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

alternative medicines
treatments
positive development
negative development
health problems
usual doctor
access
personalized approach
holistic well-being
lack of regulation
evidence-based research
proper medical treatment

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