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The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in on European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in on European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
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The bar graph illustrates the various
modes
 of transportation used for commuting to and from work in a European city in four groups, namely bus,
car
, bike and foot, in 1960, 1980, and 2000. Units were measured in the form of
percentage
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percentages
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.
Overall
, what stands out the most from the graph is that the largest proportion of
modes
 were all different in given years. The highest
percentage
 of
travelers
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travellers
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traveled
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travelling
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with
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by
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cars
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car
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in
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was in
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 2000,
while
least
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the lowest
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percentage
 of people chose
the
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a
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car
 in 1960. The most significant difference in the
percentage
 of transport
modes
 was found in
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the year
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year
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years
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 1960 and 2000. In terms of
year
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 1960, foot ranked first in the
modes
 of transportation for commuting at around 34
percent
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per cent
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, followed by bike,
bus
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and bus
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, having around 25 and 17
percent
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per cent
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. The most marginal
percentage
 was found in
car
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cars
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 at approximately 5
percent
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per cent
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 in the same
year
. With regards to
year
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 2000,
opposite
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the opposite
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 trend was witnessed where the
percentage
 of
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the car
a car
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car
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cars
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 made up the highest
percentage
 at around 35
percent
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per cent
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, and
this
 figure was 30
percent
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 higher than that of 40 years ago. In 1980, all
modes
 of transportation were taken by travelers, ranging from 15 to 26
percent
, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words modes, car, percentage, year, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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