Billions of dollars are being wasted each year in space research . The money could be better used to improve conditions on earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement
Research indeed plays a crucial role in the world. Some
people
say that a large amount of money
is spent on space
projects
in
every year but Change preposition
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this
billion of dollars could be spent for developing Earth
's situations. I partially agree with this
statement for the following reasons.
To begin
with, spending more money
on space
research will bring a plethora of benefits to the population. This
is, because many crowds have more curiosity about space
investigation, not only the astronauts and scientists but also
individuals. This
kind of analysis to be
needed to understand the future, past and present periods, henceforth many countries allocate bulk amounts of capital for Change the verb form
is
this
such
as the USA and Russia. For example
, these two nations spend three millions
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million
in
every year Change preposition
apply
for
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on
space
projects
which are NASA and Retro Cosmo sphere.
That's why people
have a chance to understand about
other planets, Change preposition
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hence
, spending huge amounts on space
investigations is youthful.
In contrast
, this
money
could be spent on Earth
's projects
and development in
the grounds the ministry should address some serious issues like starvation, poverty, medical facilities, education, shelters and Change preposition
on
infrasture
because of inequality in Correct your spelling
infrastructure
social
. Many Replace the word
society
people
affected
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are affected
this
issue and they need all these amenities to live a better life, so, the local administration should spend Change preposition
by this
money
to improve people
's livelihoods. For instance
, 20th-century astronaut Mr N. Armstrong has already done space
projects
how
much we need, so allocating bulk amounts Change preposition
on how
on
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space
analysis are waste instead
of using that money
to improve humankind's way of lifestyle. In addition
, many deadly diseases and natural catastrophes threaten crowds
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crowds'
crowd's
life
, so, the government could pay more Fix the agreement mistake
lives
money
on
the Change preposition
to
Earth
.
In conclusion, spending a huge amount of money
on space
research in
every year is not a waste because we have to understand the future, past and present conditions. Change preposition
apply
However
, that money
could be used on the Earth
development on the grounds Change noun form
Earth's
there
are some crucial problems to be addressed which Correct word choice
that there
poverty
and starvation. Add a missing verb
are poverty
Therefore
, I partly agree with this
statement in the above-mentioned details.Submitted by reanudeepan on
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