IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7

Your friend invited you to his/her party, but you are unable to attend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •explain why you cannot come •give your reason for not contacting your friend sooner •suggest another time to meet Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ____________,

#friend #party #•explain #•give #reason #•suggest #time #addresses #____________
Dear Sandra, Thank you so much for sending me your
birthday
 invitation. Can’t believe how time flies! Seems like yesterday when we’d all gone to Deosai to celebrate your
last
birthday
. Unfortunately, I’ll not be able to attend the party
this
 time around.
You
Add an auxiliary verb
Do you
show examples
 remember Alex from our high school time? He is getting married in London on the 23rd of June which is a day before your
birthday
. I had accepted his invitation before yours came.
Also
, after the event I plan to stay a bit in England to explore the highlands of Aberdeen with kids. I will be back by mid-July and we will be celebrating my son Hasan’s 5th
birthday
 on the 22nd
July
Change preposition
of July
show examples
. Why don’t you come and join us for a week?
This
 way you will be able to meet
rest
Correct article usage
the rest
show examples
 of my family as well. They keep asking about you. Do write back and let me know your plan. Love, Hudiba
Submitted by hudibaiqbal on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
Although the letter is well-structured, a bit more detail on why you couldn't contact your friend sooner would improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Beautiful transitions, but some sentences could be streamlined to enhance flow even further.
suitable writing tone
The letter is appropriately warm and personal, creating an inviting tone suitable for a friend.
single idea per paragraph
You’ve effectively used paragraphs to separate different ideas, each point is clearly explained.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: