The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the visits made to a town's
website
during the first and second years of its establishment.
Overall
it is immediately apparent that there were more people using the
website
in the first
year
than the following
year
. In the first
year
, February had the highest recording at a little over 40,000
users
followed by October and June at 40,000 and approximately 39,000 respectively. Meanwhile, over 30,000 persons used the
website
in January and September
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about 38,000 and 35,000 respectively. The same number of individuals visiting the
website
in August
,
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did so in December.
By contrast
, nearly half the
users
in August and December, used the
website
in April at about 15,000
whereas
half of the
users
in October visited the
website
in June. In the second
year
, whilst January saw the most viewers at just more than 20,000, April which had the least
users
had about a quarter the figure in January at 5,000.
Although
July and October recorded 20,000 each, only half of these numbers used the
website
in May, June and September.
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significant
users
visited the
website
at nearly 20,000 in February, November and December.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words website, year, users with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • decline
  • trend
  • notable
  • consistent
  • significant
  • contrast
  • stabilize
  • visits
  • community website
  • first year
  • second year
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