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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The line graph illustrates the percentages of households with washing machines,
refrigerators
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 and vacuum cleaners and the number of
hours
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 spent in a week doing household
work
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 in a particular country between 1920 and 2019.
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, the use of all three mentioned electrical appliances in a house increased over the years. The use of
refrigerators
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 increased dramatically to be available in almost all households
along with
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 the vacuum cleaner. Despite of use of these appliances, the
hours
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 spent on housework reduced throughout the years.
Refrigerators
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 were barely used
at
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in
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 homes in 1920, yet, had a dramatic surge to reach up to 90% availability and continued to grow till they
finally
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 reached 100% in 1960 and 1980 respectively. Vacuum cleaners were only used in 30% of households and it increased steadily to tally up with
refrigerators
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 in 2000. Washing machines had fluctuating growth throughout the years and ended up being the least used equipment by 2019. In 1920 people used to
work
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 50
hours
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 a week doing household
work
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 and it decreased steadily to reach 20
hours
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 in 1960. By 2019 only nearly 10
hours
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 per week
are
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will be
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 spent on household
work
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Vocabulary: Replace the words refrigerators, hours, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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