You have received a job offer for an exciting, new position. Although you are expected to start on September 7th, you are only available to start a week later due to personal reasons. Write a letter to your new boss. In your letter: Express your enthusiasm for the job offer. Explain the problem Suggest what you can do

Dear Mr Singh, I am writing
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letter to request your assistance with extending my joining date in your organisation.
Although
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I am excited to join your company and work with
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motivated employees.Unfortunately, my mom
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not
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well for the past few days.Recently, she has been hospitalised in Surrey Hospital, despite
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my brother is
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out of town.I do not have anyone to take care of my mother,
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it will be difficult for me
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working with you. My brother will reach home after 1 week, till that time I have to support my mom.
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, I am willing to assist you on weekends and stay for longer hours till the time my tasks are not achieved.
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, I would appreciate it if you could extend my joining date by one week. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours sincerely saransh sharma

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Task response: You answer all parts, but explain your problem more clearly in one full sentence.
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Task response: Your tone is polite, but some lines sound a bit too direct. Keep the tone warm and formal.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are clear, but some sentences are joined the wrong way. Use full stops or link words more carefully.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each paragraph. This will make your letter easier to follow.
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Task response: You clearly say you are happy about the job and you ask for one more week.
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Task response: You give a real reason and you offer help, so the reader can see your good will.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your opening and closing are suitable for a work letter.
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