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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#internet #newspapers
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It has become increasingly common for people to access the
news
 electronically rather than with traditional
newspapers
 with many commentators
suggest
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suggesting
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 that
this
 could mean the end for
newspapers
. I would agree with
this
 and think that in the future
newspapers
 will disappear.
Firstly
,
news
 accessed online is much more
interaction
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 than in a newspaper.
Readers
 can comment on stories, and
discussing
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 items on message boards.
Furthermore
, many more photographs can included with a
story
 with many sites even give
readers
 the opportunity to upload their own photos and videos.
Secondly
,
news
 read on the internet
are
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 much more current than in a newspaper. It is possible for
readers
 to read about stories as they happen and watch the development.
This
 is compared with
newspapers
 which only report on the previous
days
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day's
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 events.
As a result
, they seem increasingly dated even before they are on sale.
Finally
, online
news
offer
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readers
 much more choice and
a more information
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more information
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. It is possible to read the same
story
 from a range of different sources on the internet. Some people suggest that
this
 is better than only reading the
story
 in one newspaper as you can compare different ones and have different viewpoints and the way stories are presented.
This
 is compared with traditional
newspapers
 which might only report one side of the
story
. In conclusion, I would argue that in the future it will become increasingly difficult to sell
newspapers
. Because traditional
newspapers
 will not be able to compete they will disappear.
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clarity
Improve the complexity and variety of sentence structures to enhance clarity and engagement for the reader.
accuracy
Ensure consistent grammatical accuracy, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'news read on the internet is much more current').
content
Include more specific examples to effectively support your points.
structure
The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant, adequately framing the essay's argument.
clarity
The essay presents logical and clear ideas, such as the timeliness and interactivity of online news.
content
The essay effectively discusses multiple perspectives on the topic, comparing online news with traditional newspapers.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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