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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting
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The bar chart illustrates how much money
earned
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 annually by
the
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American
families
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 in the years 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there was a growing number of
families
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 who received annual income of $100,000 or more over the period of nine years.
According to
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 the data, the number of American households who were able to collect their yearly income of $100,000 or more showed an upward trend from nearly 30
million
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 households in 2007 to their highest number at around 34
millions
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 in nine years.
Similarly
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, those who earned less than $25,000 every year and those who received revenues between $25,000-$49,999 per annum increased as well,
although
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 not as much as those with $100,000 and more, by around 2 and 3
million
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families
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 throughout the period.
On the other hand
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,
families
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 in the USA who collect salaries
within
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 $50,000-$74,999 and those with salaries ranging between $75,000-$99,999 remained steady over the nine-year period, at approximately 21
million
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 and about 15
million
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 households, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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