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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 to 2007

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 to 2007
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The line graph compares the differences in overseas
visitors
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 to the Mountains, the coast and the lakes in a European country from 1987 to 2007.
Overall
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, overseas
visitors
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 from three different areas experienced different trends in the time period.
While
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 the beaches were the most popular place during the period.
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, the number of
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 increased in all the places from 1987 until 2007. As the graph reveals, the number of
visitors
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 on the coast figure started at 40000
people
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 in 1987,
then
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 it steadily decreased to around 35000
people
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 in 1992. Followed by a gradual increase gradually in the next three years to reach a peak of 75000
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 in 2007. Regarding ,
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 to the Mountains in 1987, 20000 humans visited. The figure slowly rose to 35000 individuals in 2007.
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, in 1987 Overseas
visitors
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 visited the lakes by nearly 10000
people
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 and the figure grew rapidly to reach the highest indicator of 75000 individuals in 2002.
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 it quickly declined until it reached its lowest point of 50000
people
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 in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • number of
  • areas
  • European country
  • between
  • 1987 and 2000
  • graph
  • introduce
  • overview
  • trends
  • describe
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • summarize
  • main findings
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