The pie charts below show the different types of courses, which were followed by the students during the years of 1984, 1994 and 2004
The pie chart compares the shares of four major
courses
studied by the students in three different years :1984 , 1994 and 2004 .
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Overall
it is clear that
by 2004 popularity of face to
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face-to-face
face
courses
had ranked first ,and while
that of mixed media ones increased dramatically , there was a corresponding drop in that of correspondence courses
.In addition
, the figure for online courses
remained stable although
they didn’t exist at
the first year .
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in
Face to
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Face-to-face
face
courses
saw a slow drop from 67% in 1984 to 54% in 1994 and ended at 40% by the end of the period .similarly
, there was a negligible rise in mixed media ones from 13% to 35% .
In contrast
, a marginal drop was seen in the share of correspondence courses
from 20% to 10%,and while
online courses
didn’t exist at
the first year, Change preposition
in
it
hit a plateau Correct pronoun usage
they
at
20% during the period .Change preposition
of
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