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In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students.Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach in teaching?

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Many schools all over the world are switching to using
technology
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 as their way to teach
students
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instead
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 of using traditional methods.
This
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 essay will discuss the advantages and drawbacks of using
technology
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 as a main source of knowledge. On one hand, the
internet
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 provides
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 with unlimited educational materials, including e-books, online courses, and many YouTube videos.
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 might lead to them understanding more about the particular topic they are currently studying.
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, digital learning reduces the need for expensive printed textbooks, allowing
students
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 to save their money and use it for later conveniences.
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,
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 who are struggling with money won’t need to buy many expensive things
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 as textbooks, pens, pencils, and school uniforms.
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, they can buy other important needs.
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, there are
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 many disadvantages to online learning.
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, teachers play a crucial role in
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' development,
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 as creativity and thinking skills. Without these teachers,
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 may find it difficult to come up with solutions to problems they have never seen before
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 a lack of creativity and thinking skills.
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, online
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 and courses may not be as effective as face-to-face learning.
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, many online platforms can't answer
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' questions
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 not having built-in AI
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 to help the
students
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 on that website or because they are behind a paywall, which is usually quite expensive. In conclusion, even though
technology
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 is much easier and affordable in some cases, the drawbacks outweigh its advantages because it is not as effective as traditional teaching, and most websites' AI that help
students
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 learn are behind a paywall.

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Task Response
Ensure your introduction clearly outlines both the advantages and disadvantages you will cover in your essay, as well as your overall opinion, if applicable.
Task Response
Consider providing a more balanced view by explicitly stating equal weight for the advantages and disadvantages in your conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on transitioning between points and expanding on ideas to strengthen your argument and clarity of thought.
Task Response
Add more specific examples to support your arguments, particularly in the disadvantages section, to provide a comprehensive perspective.
Content
Good identification of advantages and clear examples pertaining to the affordability aspect of online learning.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • interactive
  • personalized learning
  • collaboration
  • cost-effectiveness
  • engagement
  • digital resources
  • virtual classrooms
  • educational technology
  • learning styles
  • information overload
  • distraction
  • screen fatigue
  • inequality in access
  • teacher-student relationship
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