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Aircraft have been increasingly used for transport fruit and vegetable to some country where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In
this
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 generation, we cannot imagine that we are running out of fresh
ingredients
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 as carrots, strawberries and garlic every day.
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 the development of
transport
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, it is really easy to get fresh
ingredients
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 for everyone. The number of usage transports
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 as aeroplanes and ships for plants has been increasing gradually because people always require plants and fresh
ingredients
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 instantly. Some economists say for some reason,
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 phenomenon is good for everyone in the world.
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, we do not have to worry about running out of fresh
ingredients
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 by massive
transport
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services
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 for plants and
ingredients
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.
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, the economic growth of other countries activates at the same time.
According to
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 a survey, the economic growth of territories has been increasing across the world by outrageous imports and exports of fresh
ingredients
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.
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, it is helpful to other specific territories
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 as Africa where is hard to grow specific fruits like strawberries or grapes.
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, some pessimists
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 as environmental campaigners argue that the earth is getting sicker environmentally.
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 eminent geographic scholars, the depletion of the ozone layer is exacerbated by abusing
transport
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services
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such
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 as aircraft and ships massively. In
this
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 case, the more consumers buy fresh
ingredients
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 the more merchants and providers are using
transport
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services
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. And people are wasting natural resources like vegetables more and more. In conclusion, there are pessimistic perspectives and optimistic perspectives about having an increase of using massive
transport
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services
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. But in my opinion,
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 issue is likely to be controversial continuously because there is a correlation between opportunities from
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 and difficulties from
transport
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services
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clear comprehensive ideas
To improve clarity, ensure to use more precise vocabulary and avoid ambiguous phrases such as 'outrageous imports and exports'. Instead, use terms like 'substantial' or 'significant'.
relevant specific examples
It's important to clearly develop each point. The argument about the economic benefits of transport can be elaborated with more specific data or examples.
supported main points
Try to balance the arguments more evenly. The paragraph opposing the use of aircraft for transporting fresh produce could be expanded with additional reasoning or evidence.
introduction conclusion present
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, guiding the reader smoothly through the discussion.
logical structure
The use of linking words and phrases such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In addition' helps in maintaining a logical structure and flows between ideas.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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