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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram shows the process of creating electricity by a hydroelectric
power
Use synonyms
 station.
Overall
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, the process starts with
water
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 in the river and the final product is electricity.
In addition
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, its flow of
water
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 is divided into two different stages which are day and night.
Firstly
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,
water
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 from the river flows into the high-level
reservoir
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 which is blocked by the dam. At day, in the intake, it is opened so
water
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 from the high-level
reservoir
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 runs to reversible turbines and
then
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 low-level
reservoir
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.
Therefore
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, it makes turbines spin. After that, the generator which is located in the
power
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 station operates and produces electricity.
Then
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 the product is transported to the national grid by
power
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 lines.
In contrast
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, at night, the flow of
water
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 is reversed.
Water
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 from the low-level
reservoir
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 is pumped through reversible turbines in the
power
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 station and
then
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 taken to the high-level
reservoir
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.
In addition
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, at that time, in the intake, it is closed.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, water, reservoir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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