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Some people believe that nowadays there are too many choices. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

#people #choices
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There is no denying the fact that nowadays, achieving anything that a person wants has become easier than in the past.
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 it is a commonly held belief that recently
people
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 have several
choices
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, there is
also
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I believe that we have extraordinary
choices
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 in the world that we live in now.
To begin
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 with, the new innovations of technology that have been created
last
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 century helped to expand humans'
choices
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.
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, the internet
as well as
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 computers provide numerous sources if anyone wants to tackle anything new.
In addition
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,
this
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 phenomenon has helped thousands of adults to have more options in their careers.
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, if a person wants to make a career shift, it has become easier than in the past,
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 they may even not hold a degree, and all of
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 because of technology. Another point to consider, since travelling has become more easy and affordable folks have started to have massive opportunities and a variety of
choices
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. It is
also
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 possible to say that, travelling could provide many options to
people
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 who want to move to a new country and start a new life from scratch.
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, we have now the opportunity to explore and discover any spot on the earth
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 the new transpiration that has been created.
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, in the past
people
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 could not travel long distances and discover it, because of several reasons
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 as the time a journey will take and how much it will cost. In conclusion, despite
people
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 having different views, I believe that nowadays humans have more life
choices
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 and opportunities from the past and probably
this
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 is because of the technology and the lifestyle that we live now.
Submitted by marim.almualim on

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task achievement
To improve task achievement, include more specific and relevant examples. Drawing on a broader range of evidence will make your argument more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. While your essay is generally well-structured, occasionally the points could be linked more clearly to improve the logical flow.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction sets up the argument well, and the conclusion effectively summarizes your points.
clear comprehensive ideas
You present clear and comprehensive ideas on the topic, particularly focusing on the impact of technology and travel on increasing choices.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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