The chart below show the changes of electrical appliance and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019 .
The line graph illustrates the proportion of families who utilized electric tools, which are washing machines, refrigerators, and
vacuum
cleaners
, along with
the number of hours occupied to do the housework every week in a particular country from 1920 to 2019. Overall
, it is clear that
at the end
of the period, all families in the country managed to own a refrigerator and a vacuum
cleaner, while
the percentage of ownership of all appliances tended to increase over a decade, which makes them spent
less time in doing housework activities at the same period.
Wrong verb form
spend
According to
the data, it is clear that
the number of households with refrigerators and vacuum
cleaners
showed a similar pattern, while
there were no family
who owned any Fix the agreement mistake
families
refrigerator
and one-third of them had Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
vacuum
cleaners
in 1920, the rate grew until everyone had such
appliances in 2019. In addition
, the rate of people who had washing machine
in their Fix the agreement mistake
machines
house
rose as well, Fix the agreement mistake
houses
although
not as much as those who owned refrigerators and vacuum
cleaners
, from 40% of them in 1920 to around 75% in 2019.
On the other hand
, the number of hours families were
spent Unnecessary verb
apply
for
doing their household matters, Change preposition
apply
such
as washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning, experienced a decline. From 50 hours per week in 1920, the amount of time dropped significantly during the first forty years by 60% compared to the beginning of the period. Furthermore
, it had decreased slightly by 20% for the remaining sixty years.Submitted by michellyonggo on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that, such, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vacuum, cleaners with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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