The impact that growing demand for more flights has had on the environment is a major concern for many countries. Some people believe that one way to limit the number of people traveling by air is to increase taxes on flights. To what extent do you think this could solve the problem?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • economic activity
  • sustainable aviation technologies
  • alternative forms of transportation
  • sustainable travel behaviors
  • financial disincentives
  • public awareness campaigns
  • tourism-based economies
  • social equity
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