The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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The bar chart shows the amount of time that people from various nationalities spend enjoying different categories of recreational activities in the month of August as a holiday in Greece. It can seen that the proportion of spending time on the beach is most preferred by Brazilian and Turkish nationals
while
the
Chinese
and
Americans
spend most of their time reading books,
Additionally
,
Chinese
tourists remain on top as compared to their American competitors in reading books. The Brazillian tourists spent up to 6
hours
on the beach in comparison to the Turkish, who spent nearly 5
hours
a day,
while
the
Americans
and
Chinese
spent 4
hours
and 3
hours
respectively. When it comes to reading books, the
Chinese
remain dominant in
this
regard, soaring up to 8
hours
a day,
while
Americans
trail behind them at 5
hours
a day. Looking at the activity of visiting places, the
Americans
and Turkish visitors, both spent 3
hours
. The
Chinese
are the lowest in
this
regard, spending the lowest at only an hour and Brazillian spending only an extra hour comparatively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chinese, americans, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • leisure activities
  • tourists
  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
  • interests
  • vacation
  • influence
  • participation
  • impact
  • weather
  • events
  • festivals
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