The diagram below illustrates the process by which bricks are made for the building industry. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
shown
diagram illustrates the procedure of making machine-made Verb problem
apply
Use synonyms
brick
.
Fix the agreement mistake
bricks
Overall
, there are several raw materials, Linking Words
such
as Linking Words
clay
, water, Use synonyms
sand
. There are some stages to Correct word choice
and sand
produce
a Wrong verb form
producing
brick
. Use synonyms
Process
begins with Add an article
The process
excavator
digging the Correct article usage
the excavator
clay
and ends with delivering a batch of Use synonyms
bricks
to Use synonyms
construction
place.
Correct article usage
the construction
First
of all, a digger digs Use synonyms
a
Remove the article
clay
a lump of clay
clay
from the ground. Dug Use synonyms
clay
is placed on Use synonyms
metal
grid, Add an article
a metal
Linking Words
then
Correct word choice
and then
rolling it
on a roller to divide huge and small pieces from each other. Wrong verb form
rolled
After
Linking Words
this
, there are 2 ways to give the Linking Words
brick
the shape. The Use synonyms
first
way is Use synonyms
clay
going through a machine which gives the form of Use synonyms
long
rectangle, sliced into pieces obtaining Add an article
a long
short
rectangle form. The second way is putting Correct article usage
a short
a
Remove the article
clay
a lump of clay
clay
into a mould, getting the Use synonyms
brick
shape afterwards. In both ways, the sand and the water are added before Use synonyms
Use synonyms
clay
gets its shape. The 4th step is to leave a batch of semi-ready Correct article usage
the clay
bricks
in a drying oven for 1-2 days.
After drying it, objects get to the special machine, which contains 3 parts. The Use synonyms
first
two are kilns, and the Use synonyms
last
one is Linking Words
cooling
chamber. In the Add an article
the cooling
a cooling
first
kiln, the Use synonyms
bricks
are moderately heated to 200-900 degrees Celsius. Use synonyms
Thereafter
, the second kiln is way hotter than the Linking Words
first
one, heating the Use synonyms
bricks
to 870-1300 degrees Celsius. Boiling Use synonyms
bricks
are cooled in a chamber for 2 to 3 days. Use synonyms
Finally
, after the cooling is finished, the Linking Words
bricks
are packaged and transported to a certain destination.Use synonyms
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