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The map below shows a civic centre between the present and its plan. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The map below shows a civic centre between the present and its plan. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
#centre #plan #information #features #comparisons
The maps provide the information of the civic centre at Victoria
avenue
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Avenue
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 in the present compared to the information of a
future
 plan.
Overall
, it can be seen that the most of areas will be changed into
the
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apply
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new businesses in the
future
. ?
While
, there is no change of road, only
underground
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an underground
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 car park will be constructed under the town hall. The civic centre was built between High
street
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Street
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 and Smith
street
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Street
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 with the same size of area at the moment and in the
future
. Presently, the cinema which is located in the middle between two car parks
,
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 will be not changed in the
future
 but
car
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the car
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park
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parks
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 on the left side and
right
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the right
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 side will be built into
cafe
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a cafe
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 and hotel and restaurant respectively. Looking at the
future
 plan, there
are
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is
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 a significant change. The exhibition will be downsized and moved to the right corner which is near
shopping
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the shopping
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 centre.
While
 the library will be
contructed
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constructed
 underground,
carpark
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a car park
 will be built underground
of
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from
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 the town hall.
Furthermore
, the council offices will be moved into the left corner opposite
to
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the cafe.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words future with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Civic centre
  • Present
  • Plan
  • Comparison
  • Main features
  • Map
  • Summarize
  • Information
  • Report
  • Relevant
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