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You saw a program on TV recently and found it unreasonable for viewers. Write a letter about its quality and content of the material presented. In tour letter Describe what you did not like Make some suggestions Say what you expect from the TV editors to do for you

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to draw your attention to
Television
Correct article usage
the Television
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program
 I saw yesterday on the Prime channel. The name of the
program
 is Crime Petrol which is telecast on weekdays. I watch
this
program
 every day and It gives us good advice about how to protect from criminals in real life.
However
 , yesterday
this
program
 was about how children commit crimes in different ways. It creates a negative impact on youngsters as they are not aware
about
Change the preposition
of
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the difference between right and wrong things. Children try to imitate these things at home
as well as
 their mind starts to
thinking
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think
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 about adversity. I want you to stop telecasting child criminal cases
due to
 safety reasons or else try to make these kinds of programs in a positive manner. I do not understand how can Censorship Board allow
this
program
 to be aired.I request you to remove
this
program
 and never show it in future. I solicit for your co-operation. Yours Faithfully, Tom Smith.
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task achievement
Try to provide specific examples or details to support your points for better clarity and impact.
coherence cohesion
Improve the transition between paragraphs to enhance the flow of your letter.
task achievement
The letter has a polite and suitable tone for addressing the TV editors.
coherence cohesion
You have logically organized your main points into separate paragraphs.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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