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The table below provides statistics on several major metro (MRT) systems around the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below provides statistics on several major metro (MRT) systems around the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table above illustrates in-depth information about different metro systems in main cities across the globe.
Overall
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, we can see that the year each of them was completed varies, most of them were completed in the 1900s
while
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 Los Angeles finished in 2001 and London is the oldest it finished in 1863
as well as
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 Paris which finished in 1890. As for the total
length
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 the longest is London with 1100
KM
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then
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 Paris and the others are in the 100s and 10s KMs,
on the other hand
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, the city that has the most carrying
capacity
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 is Tokyo with 1434
million
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.
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, even though London is
longest
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the longest
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 in
length
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but
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it is not the highest in carrying
capacity
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, it comes in third with 548
million
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. Tokyo with only a
length
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 of 149
KM
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 has the highest carrying
capactiy
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capacity
 of 1434
million
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while
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also
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 Paris comes in second with 850
million
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 and a
length
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 of 594
KM
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.
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, the shortest in
length
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 and lowest in carrying
capacity
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 is Kyoto with only 11
KM
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 and 11
million
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 carrying
capacity
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. In comparison, Los
Angles
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Angeles
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 is the second shortest but still has a
relativily
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relatively
 high carrying
capacity
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 of 90
million
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.
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, Washington DC is fourth in the total
length
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 of 149
KM
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 and
a
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has a
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low carrying
capacity
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 of only 70
million
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words length, km, capacity, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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