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It seems to be an increasing trend towards assessing student through exams rather than assessment. What are the advantages and disadvantages of exams as a form of assessment?

#trend #student #exams #form
It is believed by
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To begin
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 children should not have
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 age which might affect their mental growth ,
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Secondly
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 and behave properly during the academic year.
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exams
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work hard and create a competitive atmosphere between
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 I truly believe that both
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students
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • assessing
  • evaluation
  • uniformity
  • standardization
  • competitive environment
  • motivate
  • stress and anxiety
  • negative impact
  • narrow comprehension
  • concentrate on memorization
  • recall information
  • mastery
  • reliance
  • practical applications
  • continuous assessment
  • short-term approach
  • knowledge retention
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