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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below show the development of the horse over a period of 40 million years. The evolution of the horse, with particular emphasis on the changing foot structure. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below show the development of the horse over a period of 40 million years. The evolution of the horse, with particular emphasis on the changing foot structure. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1
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This
 diagram illustrates the
horse
 growth during 40 million years. The progress of the
horse
, with specific attention on
variation
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the variation
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 of the
foot
 formation.
Overall
, the
horse
when
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went
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 through a significant development over
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the decates
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decates
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decades
 with major
change
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changes
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 in its
foot
 design.
Forthermore
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Furthermore
, we can notice a significant reduction in the number of bones forming its
foot
 plus,
different
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a different
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 given
name
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names
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 to
this
 animal over time. 40
millions
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million
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 years ago it was named Eohippus,
smaler
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smaller
 in
size
 and having five vertebrae on the
foot
, after 10
millions year
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million years
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 it was called Mesohippus with a slight increase in
size
 and a reduction of 2 bones. The 3 vertebrae left had the middle one
protuding
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protruding
 and bigger in
size
. The Merychippus
arise
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arose
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 15 million years ago and was almost similar
with
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to
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 the mesohippus with 3
vertebraes
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vertebrae
vertebrates
 with a reduction of one bone on all
them
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of them
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. Nowadays, the
horse
 has all the vertebrae combined into one complex
foot
 with a significant increase in
size
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words horse, foot, size with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduction" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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