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Task 1 The plans below show aharbour in 2000 and how it looks today

#plans #show #aharbour
The
map
 provides key information about
harbour
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 in 2000 and the present day. First of all, in 2000 we have the main road is the west from the
map
. After that we have two showers and toilets and the opposite from there we have a car park. That changed today and one of the car parks has a shower and toilet section.
Moreover
, the marina private yachts
before
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24 years ago were the northwest on the
map
. Nowadays the marina comes to the southwest from the
map
.
However
, in the south corner of the
map
before
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24 years ago, there
were
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was
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public
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a public
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 beach near the castle. But today, they replaced
to
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the hotel
and
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with and
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 private beach for the hotel. It is
also
 important to highlight, today the harbour has one more from the dock.
To sum up
, the changes on the
map
 are not huge. The big change was the private beach.
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task achievement
Try to provide more specific details and comparisons between the two maps to fully address the task. For instance, what was situated in the southwest in 2000, and what is in its place today?
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear and distinct purpose. For example, use one paragraph to discuss the changes in infrastructure and another to discuss changes in amenities.
task achievement
You have accurately highlighted some of the key changes between the two time periods, such as the change from a public to a private beach.
coherence cohesion
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion which frames your essay well.

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