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Writing Samples
Band 6

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear Ahmad, I have come to know through your letter that you recently changed your
school
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. But after a few
days
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 you realized that you are not feeling comfortable in
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 institution. Dear, I think it’s quite normal you shouldn’t be worried about it because it takes time to adjust to the new atmosphere. I know you are an intelligent person and have an attractive personality, so
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 suggest some tips which may help you to adjust to
school
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. First of all, you have to make new friends. Introducing yourself to your classmates exchanging notes and providing helping materials is the best way to develop friendships between class fellows.
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, you should join the sports and art clubs at your
school
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. And take part in all the activities of
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 club
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 your choice, I hope
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 will boost your confidence and hidden skills.
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 but not least you should be punctate and prepare assignments
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 time. All the teachers of your
school
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 are respectable to you so you behave respectfully and be humble to your teachers. I hope these tips help you adjust
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the
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school
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. Best regards Kunwar

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Task Achievement
To further enhance your score in task achievement, ensure that your suggestions are clear, specific, and directly address the concerns outlined in the prompt. Also, expanding on each idea with examples or further explanation can make your response more comprehensive and engaging.
Coherence and Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, focusing on more varied and complex transitions between paragraphs and ideas can enhance the flow of your letter. Additionally, being attentive to paragraph structure by clearly separating distinct ideas into separate paragraphs can improve clarity and organization.
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