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Research shows that business meetings, discussions and training are happening online nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, an increasing number of companies are holding official
meeting
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 and training online, because it is effective and convenient compared with traditional
method
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.
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 atmosphere makes people unconcentrated, which is obviously a disadvantage.
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 essay will look at
benefits
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 and drawbacks of
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 trend. On the positive side, business conferences that
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 via the internet not only
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 workers time
,
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 but
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justifies
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organization
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 of
this
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 event, since it does not require everyone to meet at
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 time and exact place.
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, managers have more freedom in arranging it.
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, it is beneficial in a case when workers are allowed to work at home,
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 as IT specialists, as they are not forced to attend
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 office.
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 of business meetings can be held on popular online platforms
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zoom
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, skype, discord
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etc.
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Nevertheless
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 online conferences
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 have some disadvantages like
unserious
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 environment,
due to
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 the fact that people would do anything during the meeting,
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 as playing a game or eating a meal, as they are at their own apartment.
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, misunderstanding will
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 leading to a
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staff
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 turnover, since employees will not
able
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 to do their
job
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 accurately. To illustrate, during the recent
quarantine
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quarantine,
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 some companies lost their employees because they got too unserious working online and
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 deadlines.
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although
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 online business meetings have certain advantages as convenience and effectiveness, it has an extremely negative impact on workers who
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 into
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laziness at home.
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language
Ensure consistency in terms of formality and clarity of language. Phrases like 'plethora of' can sound overly formal or unnatural in some contexts. Stick to a more neutral tone for this type of essay.
example
Incorporate more detailed examples to support your points. For instance, instead of just mentioning platforms like Zoom or Skype, you could explain a specific scenario where an online meeting was beneficial.
language
Work on sentence structure to avoid fragments and run-on sentences. This will improve readability and flow.
structure
The essay is well-structured with a clear introduction, body paragraphs discussing advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion.
example
There are good specific examples to illustrate points, such as mentioning platforms like Zoom and the impact of the recent quarantine.
conclusion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points discussed in the essay and presents a balanced view.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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