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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals I different parts of the world. Sumarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals I different parts of the world. Sumarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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the line chart compares the numbers of international travellers
visited
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who visited
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in
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apply
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five countries, which is Brazil, Egypt, Malaysia, France and the USA, for the period from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the USA had the most international tourists over the 15 years,
while
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 both Egypt and Brazil nearly had the least compared with others.
In addition
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, France had significantly gone up over the period. It is noticeable that the USA had 70
million
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 international farers in 1995, which is more than the other four countries combined, and reached a peak of 90
million
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 in 2005, and
then
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 fell slightly to 85
million
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 in 2010.
Although
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 there were only 30
million
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 international tourists
for
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in
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 France in 1995, the number doubled in the next five years, and
then
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 mildly increased to 80
million
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, the same as the US in 2010. When it comes to Malaysia, the number of international travellers gradually rose from 20
million
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 in 1995 to 45
million
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 in the next 15 years. Egypt and Brazil experienced the same rising trend with
number
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a number
the number
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 of below 10
million
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 in 1995 to 20
million
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 and 15
million
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 in 2010 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international tourist arrivals
  • insight
  • trend
  • significant
  • fluctuation
  • statistic
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • surge
  • data point
  • comparative
  • quantitative analysis
  • economic factor
  • political stability
  • tourism sector
  • global event
  • destination popularity
  • benchmark
  • year-on-year change
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