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The maps below show the present building of a college and plan for changes to the college site in the future. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The left map shows the present layout of a collage building, and the
right
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 map illustrates a reconstruction
to
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of
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 the building in 2020.
Overall
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, both
parking
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the parking
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area
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 and
main
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the main
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 building will be expanded in the future.
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, the footpath and garden will be removed at that time. Delving the reconstructions into details, the footpath and garden will be removed in 2020, west part of the space be used to expand the car park
area
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, east part of the space will extend the college main building. Now there are three classrooms inside the building, after six years there will be five classrooms in total, four of them are located at
right
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 side of the building,
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 the reception
area
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 will be shifted to the center of the building, and the library will move to bottom
right
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 corner of the building.
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, the entrance by footpath will modify to the south
area
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 near the bus stop.
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 the toilet will be moved to the north
area
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. Next to
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the toilet
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toilet
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toilet,
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 there will be a shop facility which is at the up
right
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 corner of the building in the future. Lunch
area
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 and one classroom are between the shop and the library.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words right, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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