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Many people say that we have developed into a “throw-away” culture, because we are filling up our environment with so many plastic bags and rubbish that we cannot fully dispose of. To what extent do you agree with this opinion and what measures can you recommend reducing this problem ?

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It is generally believed that we produce more
garbage
 in the
environment
 than we can dispose of and we litter too much, developing a "throw-away" culture. I fully agree with
this
 matter
due to
 the huge costs of modernizing the way we dispose of our rubbish. In order to make a clean
environment
, we must make more biodegradable materials
as well as
 foster online shopping to avoid producing
garbage
. Except for a few industrialized countries, many others still struggle with a comprehensive way to reduce the
production
 of
plastic
bags
.
This
 is
due to
 the fact that providing the costs and the materials, taken to manufacture disposable
plastic
bags
, is genuinely impossible. consider a country in economic disparity
such
 as Iran. research on the
production
 of
plastic
bags
 in 2012 in the aforementioned country, revealed that by 2050,
this
 country will not be environmentally livable even by insects let alone humans
due to
 the mass
production
 of rubbish.
Nevertheless
, there are two possible solutions to
this
 problem.
Firstly
, collaborating with scientists to make more biodegradable materials in order to save the
environment
 from
this
 misery.
For instance
, the replacement of brown carton
bags
 made of wasted paper with
plastic
 ones has been widely utilized in the UK.
secondly
, distributing the culture of online shopping, helping families not only do fewer outdoor activities but
also
 receive their products delivered by motorcycles equipped with storage compartments, offering the culture of a
plastic
-free world. In conclusion,
Although
 the amount of
garbage
 produced by us is increasing fast, making our
environment
 less livable, I completely agree that most countries are unable to fully fund the
production
 of disposable rubbish.
Nonetheless
, some actions
such
 as the invention of biodegradable
garbage
as well as
 online shopping might alleviate
this
 issue.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disposable products
  • convenience-focused consumer habits
  • single-use plastics
  • fast fashion
  • environmental impact
  • landfill waste
  • pollution
  • harm to wildlife
  • recycling infrastructure
  • decomposition
  • public awareness
  • sustainable living practices
  • governmental regulations
  • biodegradable materials
  • recycling technologies
  • sustainable packaging solutions
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