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The graph below shows the changes in maximum number of Asian elephants between 1994 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changes in maximum number of Asian elephants between 1994 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph based on
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 maximum number of Asian elephants given certain periods between 1994 and 2004 was shown in that picture.
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, it can be pointed out from the graph that, India was the maximum
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 China was the minimum over the given period. According, to the grab that set Laos was the same amount in 1994 and 2007. They were above 1000.
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, in Cambodia were
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 it one another.
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, 2004 was higher by about 10% than in 1994. In comparison, China was popular throughout
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 given specific period.Both of them were below 1000 which jumped down in 2004.
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, the big increase belonged to Indian India
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 the maximum was under 10000 and the minimum 7000.
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, India lowest result for high-rises than different countries for a certain period.
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, Vietnam, Columbia, and China with regard to one another. So only in
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 which had hugely change
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trend
  • decline
  • increase
  • decrease
  • population
  • significant
  • dramatic
  • stability
  • data
  • estimate
  • notable
  • comparative
  • contrast
  • approximately
  • maximum
  • over the period
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