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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.
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The above map shows the difference between 1995 and
present
Correct article usage
the present
show examples
due to
 the development of the village of
Ryemouth
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Tynemouth
. Most of the areas are developed into residential
area
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areas
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, sports
court
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courts
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 and
restaurant
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restaurants
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.
At
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On
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 the northeast side of the village, farmland and forest park have been demolished, and turned into a golf and tennis zone, encouraging more sports activities among people. It
also
 can be seen that more housing
area
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areas
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 were built in the northwest to west side as there is an
increasement
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increase
 in
household
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households
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 that reside in.
New
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The new
A new
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 road
was
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was also constructed
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also
 construct to give way to enter the new housing
area
. In the south
area
,
initially
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initially,
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 there were shops that
have been
Wrong verb form
were
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 replaced with
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and
fish
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the fish
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 market was
also
 changed to apartments near the sea between 1995
to
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and to
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 present. The fishing port at the coastline
have
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has
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 been removed
thus
 people will have a wider view of the sea. The café facing
hotel
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the hotel
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 in the southeast
area
 of the village remained the same.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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