The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.

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The above map shows the difference between 1995 and

present

Correct article usage

the present

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due to

the development of the village of

Ryemouth

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Tynemouth

. Most of the areas are developed into residential

area

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areas

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, sports

court

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courts

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and

restaurant

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restaurants

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the northeast side of the village, farmland and forest park have been demolished, and turned into a golf and tennis zone, encouraging more sports activities among people. It

also

can be seen that more housing

area

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areas

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were built in the northwest to west side as there is an

increasement

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increase

household

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households

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that reside in.

New

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The new

A new

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road

was

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was also constructed

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also

construct to give way to enter the new housing

area

. In the south

area

initially

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initially,

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there were shops that

have been

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were

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replaced with

restaurant

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restaurants

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and

fish

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the fish

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market was

also

changed to apartments near the sea between 1995

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and to

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present. The fishing port at the coastline

have

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has

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been removed

thus

people will have a wider view of the sea. The café facing

hotel

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the hotel

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in the southeast

area

of the village remained the same.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

163 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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