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You are interested in enrolling in a cooking class at a local college and would like a friend to come with you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say where and when the class will be held • give reasons why you think your friend might be interested • suggest a time and place to meet to discuss the idea Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear…

#class #college #friend #time #place #idea #addresses #dear…
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Dear Ram, I hope
this
 letter finds you in great spirits. I am writing
this
 letter because I want to give you some good news. As you know my passion is food cooking so, I recently joined a cooking class at a local college that recently opened in our area.
Moreover
, I know you are moving abroad next year for your
further
 studies and I know you don’t cook too much because your mother does most of the cooking for you. So I believe that
this
 culinary course will help you in the future because when you move abroad no one going to cook for you. So if you are interested the gastronomy workshop starts next week and if you want to know more about the course we can meet tomorrow at 9 am in the colony garden. Even it’s been 10 days since we sat together in the garden. Your lovingly, Ram
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task achievement
You could elaborate more on the details of the cooking class, such as the specific date, and what to expect from the class. This will make your letter more informative and complete.
coherence cohesion
Try to clarify the logical flow of your letter by structuring the information more clearly. For example, you can start with an introduction, then provide details about the class, reasons why your friend might be interested, and finally, suggest a meeting time.
task achievement
You have a friendly and inviting writing tone which suits the context of this letter perfectly.
coherence cohesion
Your paragraphs each contain distinct ideas, which makes the letter easy to follow and read.
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