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Some people believe that life in a big city is difficult while others say that it is more convenient. What are the advantages and disadvantages of living in big cities?

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Most
people
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 argue that life in the metropolitan
city
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 is more challenging another has an opinion it is more comfortable. There are some benefits
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 available highest level education
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 some drawbacks
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 as traffic jams and social problems. The positive is staying in a big
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 more easy to access public facilities. The train is available in the urban Centre’s many
people
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 who live there where can use transportation to help with their activities,
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, working and studying,
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, if we are staying in a rural area it is difficult to use public facilities.
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 that, Universities are always open in the major cities, so if
people
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 want to study at a high level of education where they need to move metropolis to study. There are some drawbacks to
people
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 staying in the cityscape. The first one is traffic jams because the majority of
people
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 move to a large
city
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 to get work and they want to study at university.
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, the impact is overpopulation. The second one is social problems,
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, many
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 are unemployed, and they require living costs, so if they do have not money to survive,
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 as they will commit a crime like robbery and theft to fulfil their living costs.
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, it increases crime in big cities compared to small towns.
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, there are some benefits to life in a metropolitan
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. The general population not only an easy to access public facilities but
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 gets a high-level education.
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, there are some drawbacks
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 as social problems and increasing criminalization.

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In your introduction, better delineation of the contrasting views could improve clarity.
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There are a few grammatical errors and awkward phrases; try to proofread and use varied sentence structures for better clarity.
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Make sure each paragraph has a clear central idea and provide more specific examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs to enhance coherence.
coherence cohesion
Expand on the points to add depth and richness to the essay.
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The essay identifies both advantages and disadvantages of living in a big city, addressing the prompt well.
coherence cohesion
The essay is structured with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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The main points are clear and relevant to the topic.
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Efforts to give examples, even though they could be more detailed.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Infrastructure
  • Quality of life
  • Metropolitan
  • Commuting
  • Cost of living
  • Healthcare facilities
  • Educational institutions
  • Cultural activities
  • Overcrowding
  • Pollution
  • Stress levels
  • Employment opportunities
  • Recreational
  • Sense of community
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