The following pie charts show the main modes of transportation people used to to travel to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.

The following pie charts show the main modes of transportation people used to to travel to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.
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indicates
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the various majors of transportation which
people
got accustomed to travelling to
university
for
job
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or study over a five-year period. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest
percentage
of ways to move
university
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was
car
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and bus.
However
,
people
did not use to travel to
university
by train over the period. In 2004,nearly half of
people
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(%51) tended to go to
university
by
their
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car (which was the highest
percentage
of ways of transportation over the period),just ahead of the number of students who were
into
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travelling to
university
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by bus at %46 in 2009.
Moreover
,precisely a third of
people
(%33) preferred to move to
university
by bus in 2004,compared to the
percentage
of
people
who liked to travel to
university
by car at %28 in 2009.
In contrast
,going to
university
by
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foot in 2004 was a bit as popular as walking to
university
in 2009 at %4 and %6,respectively.
In addition
,only a fraction of
people
chose to go to
university
at
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%3 in 2004.(Which was the lowest
percentage
of transportation modes over the whole year).
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