Some people claim that too much focus and resources have been spent to protect wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Protecting wild animals and birds is one of the many responsibilities that the government prioritizes.

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, it might face difficult challenges from public opinion

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too much attention and funds put into a non-profitable policy. In my perspective,

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has more advantages than drawbacks.

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it is true that giving money for preserving wild species may not create profit for the economy but the long-term stability to maintain some rare species which have a risk of close to extinction. Preventing deforestation

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saves green space and increases diversity in the biosphere. Humans will be adversely impacted if certain animal species are to become extinct.

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, bees are one of the main sources of creating a variety of foods without them humanity cannot survive within two weeks.

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, the significant increase in population around the world

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makes the tourism industry

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more viable

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animals and birds are kept in zoos and sanctuaries to provide for tourists.

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creates numerous jobs and sources of earning income for local people.

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, it can

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significantly contribute to economic growth in that nation.

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, Thailand's main source of economy is the tourism industry and has

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number of forests for wildlife and uses that to encourage many tourists to visit and have the best experience there. In conclusion,

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there are still arguments about what should be done for persevering wild animals and birds. I think the government should care about them to put some investment in but not too far to make the

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country's financial situation even worse.

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task response

Make sure to address all parts of the task more comprehensively. You mentioned both sides of the argument but could elaborate more on why you believe the advantages outweigh the drawbacks.

coherence cohesion

Improve the structure of your essay by linking your ideas more clearly. You have a good introduction and conclusion, but the body paragraphs could benefit from more logical connectors and clearer topic sentences.

coherence cohesion

You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your essay well.

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Your essay covers several relevant points and examples, which strengthens your argument.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

264 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

wildlife conservation
ecosystem preservation
sustainable development
biodiversity
habitat destruction
ecological balance
ethical responsibility
economic benefits
endangered species
poaching
education and awareness

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Many people try to achieve success through their career or education. What can success mean to different people? What is your view of success?

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Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities and other believe it is imporatant for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both views and give your opinion.