The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities
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The given map depicts data about the changes made in the
touristic
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territory.
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, it is crystal clear that there are a plethora of renovations which are done after
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many areas are replaced by one another. Well,the variations are described below.
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,the beach is surrounded by swimming and many
accomadations
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accommodations
are replaced on the island.For relaxing and entertaining the restaurant is built and reception is attached to the restaurant with
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track.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,the pier is linked to the island and boats are given
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for
tourist
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the reasons of seeing the scenery and
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the island. Looking at more
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,it is readily apparent that there
are
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a lot of
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around
accomadations
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accommodations
accommodation
.The most striking feature of
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area,if there were many trees after they
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not
also
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changed,they
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not destroyed .So,the place now is more available
for
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being
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zone for ecological reasons.
Furhemore
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Furthermore
,the second sea is vanished and replaced with
pier
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and boats.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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