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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates the difference in
divorce
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rates
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 between two European countries from 2011 to 2015.
Overall
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, the
divorce
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rates
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 in
Sweden
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 declined steadily throughout the years but fluctuated in
Finland
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. Despite
this
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,
it is clear that
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Sweden
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 has higher
divorce
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rates
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 compared to
Finland
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. The percentage of separated couples in
Sweden
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 started at around 40% in 2011, which slightly rose in 2012. In 2013, the
divorce
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rates
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 had a slight reduction before returning to the 2011 level of percentage in 2014. The Swedish
divorce
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rates
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 reached an all-time low in 2015.
Finland
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 started with a lower portion of
divorce
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rates
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 in 2011 with a percentage below 40%. After a minor decrease in 2012, the separation
rates
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 in
Finland
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 rose slightly in 2013 and 2014. In 2015, the graph shows that the separation
rates
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 were similar to the year before. 2015 was the only year where
Finland
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's level of
divorce
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 exceeded
Sweden
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's rate of
divorces
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, rates, sweden, finland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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