In the few decades, there have been more and more cases of famous people being hounded by the press. Some people think that famous people in the media should have no right to privacy. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays,
people
have different views about whether studying
history
can assist them in understanding the present times or the
history
of the past does not make any sense. Personally,
although
communities have the right to learn historical information or not, I completely believe that by knowing their past society can gain some benefits. On the one hand, it is probably true that knowing the
history
of
people
cannot significantly change the future time. It is all about the fact that some of the information in the written timeline may not be true.
Moreover
, individuals cannot simply claim that their past was as they say it was without any evidence.
Thus
, I think that historical facts are for us to just realize how the time was before and experience that period by reading or listening to them.
For instance
, many schools provide
history
lessons in order to make pupils understand their background, ancient famous
people
and traditions.
However
, there are a number of pros of learning the
history
.
Firstly
, in many countries today, the study of
history
is valued for helping
people
understand the present.
For example
, plenty of individuals realise how and to whom they currently exist by reading or studying their ancient
history
.
Secondly
, humans are not born with knowledge of their traditions and mentality. It means that only through saved and written historical elements they are able to figure out their own traditions and so on.
In addition
, the
history
is
also
impactful in order to
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other nations. To give a clear example, in some
countries
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students
also
study world
history
and after they obtain some knowledge about different countries, near and far. In conclusion, society has the freedom to choose to study or not to touch
history
, but I believe that through knowledge of the past
people
can realise what they are today
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hounded
  • sensational news
  • unwarranted scrutiny
  • blurs the line
  • public interest
  • pervasive
  • public persona
  • complex relationship
  • invasive
  • ethical frameworks
  • privacy is upheld
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