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The graph below shows the average trip length (in miles) among U.S. children aged 5 to 15 years old. Sunrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons were relevant.

The graph below shows the average trip length (in miles) among U.S. children aged 5 to 15 years old. Sunrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons were relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the average trip length in
miles
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 of US
children
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 aged between 5 and 15 years old by 6 different transportation
such
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 as walking, cycling, bus, car, train, and taxi from 1970 to 2020.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
children
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 who took the bus, car, train, or taxi for transport increased the trip lengths over the given period,
while
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 youngsters who used cycling and walking for transfers decreased. On the one hand, the distance that
children
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 aged 5-15 years old took by bus was around 27
miles
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 and jumped to about 38
miles
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 over the period.
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, young people that took by car rose from 20 to merely 31
miles
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 in 2000,
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 slightly dropped to 28
miles
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.
In addition
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, the distance that young
children
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 used trains and taxis was roughly 17 and 5
miles
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 in 1970 and fluctuated to approximately 22 and 20
miles
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, respectively in 2020.
On the other hand
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, the distance that
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was taken
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 by cycling from
children
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 was 28
miles
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 and dramatically plummeted to 18
miles
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.
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, walking took about 16
miles
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 in 1970 decreased to 4
miles
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 in 2000, and increased to approximately 8
miles
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 in 2020.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words miles, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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