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The diagram shows the life cycle of honey bee.

The diagram shows the life cycle of honey bee.
#life #cycle #honey #bee
The diagram illustrates the cycle of
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honey bee’ life. Including 4 steps: Egg, Nymph, Young adult and adult. All these steps take about 1 month
for developing
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to develop
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full
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the full
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 body of
this
 kind of insect.
Overall
, female
bees
 lay
the
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a
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 small amount of eggs in constant frequency.the biggest part of the cycle is
nymph
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the nymph
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 phase which takes
most
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 time in their life.
Moreover
, they have very short periods to mature and start the cycle again. Mother
bees
 reproduce 1 or 2 eggs every 3 days before
go
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 to the next stage, hatching after 9-10 days. After that, little
bees
 come out of their shell and start consuming plenty of
foods
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food
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for growing
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to grow
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 up.Following,
nymph’s
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the nymph’s
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 skin starts to peel off and make it 3 times bigger than usual.
Finally
, young
insect
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insects
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is emerged
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emerge
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 and
evolves
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evolve
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 to
the
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apply
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full scale
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 generations, taking
very
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a very
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 short duration, around 4 days. Full
bees
 go to
reproduction
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the reproduction
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 period, and
female
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females
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 start all these stages again
in
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apply
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every 72 hours.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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