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You have recently ordered an item through the Internet, but you are not happy with the product. Write to the company. In your letter: describe what you purchased explain why you are not happy with the product tell them what you would like them to do about it

#item #internet #product #company
Dear Sir/Madam, I hope you are doing well. Recently, I ordered a
shirt
 online from your online store and my
order
 number was e29776. I ordered a large size. Today, I received my
order
 and after unboxing the
order
 I found that the size is medium. I do not know how
this
 happened even more the colour of the
shirt
 is
also
 different. I ordered a white
shirt
 but
instead
 of that, I received a black colour. I think
this
 is not my
order
 but the address on the box is
also
 right. Can you please look into
this
 matter? And help me with my
order
. I want
this
shirt
 for my birthday which is coming next week. With
this
 email, I am
also
 sending photos of the product. The
shirt
 is in its original packaging. I hope you understand my situation. I am going to wait for your reply. Yours Sincerely, Kumar Rama.
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, ensure consistent use of punctuation, such as commas, and consider dividing complex sentences for clarity.
task achievement
To achieve a higher score in task achievement, provide more detailed information on why receiving the wrong size/color is an issue and suggest a specific solution, such as an exchange or refund.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear greeting and closing, making it polite and easy to read.
task achievement
The writing tone is suitable for a formal complaint letter, showing respect and politeness.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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