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The charts below give the information about levels of education in Glasgow, a city in Scotland, in 2010.

The charts below give the information about levels of education in Glasgow, a city in Scotland, in 2010.
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The bar and pie chart provides information regarding levels of education in Glasgow City, Scotland, in 2010 In 2010, the age
group
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 that had the least
university
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degree
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 and
school
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 certificate
as well as
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 having the most number of unqualified
people
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 was the
group
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 aged 75 and above. The
group
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 had 72
people
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 without qualifications
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25
people
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 with a
university
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degree
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 and only 3
people
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 with
school
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 certificates. The
group
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 that had the most
university
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degree
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 was aged 24 to 35 with a staggering 76
people
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. Most women in 2010 had no qualifications leading the chart at 38%, followed by having a
school
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 certificate and
university
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degree
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 with 33% and 29% respectively.
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, most
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 were unqualified at 35%. Those that had
university
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 degrees and
school
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 certificates only differ slightly with 32% and 33% consecutively.
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, the least qualification
that is
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 owned by both genders was a
university
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degree
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 with a great amount of them being unqualified.
In addition
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, most of the unqualified
people
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 came from the age higher than 75 years old.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group, university, degree, school, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • educational levels
  • qualifications
  • higher education
  • school level qualifications
  • no qualifications
  • proportions
  • notable trends
  • outliers
  • age demographics
  • economic conditions
  • social policies
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